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Short description: Bolivian politician (born 1958)
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Spot check on Ana María Sempértegui was born on 15 December 1958 in Potosí to a family of humble means involved in the department's mining industry - what's the supporting text for "a family of humble means"? I think it's from a different source to those cited.
Yeah, that should be cited to Gonzales Salas. Fixed. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Spot check on a mine mechanic stationed at Pailaviri, and his wife Elena Valdez Tardío, a career homemaker - what't the supporting text for this?
All of this is cited in Gonzales Salas: "Mis padres fueron Héctor Sempértegui Toro y Elena Valdez Tardío ... Vengo de una familia humilde; de un papá mecánico de interior mina que trabajó en la mina Pailaviri de Potosí y de una mamá ama de casa". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Spot check on She then enrolled at the women's lyceum Sucre - no issues
"lent her services to private sector corporations" - isn't it better just to say that "she worked for private sector corporations"?
Fair enough. I also restructured the sentence a bit. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Spot check on his personal accountant. - no issues
Chamber of Deputies
Spot check on giving him great latitude to select candidates as he saw fit - no issues.
"The result: Sempértegui was elected to" - Maybe just state that Sempértegui was listed and elected?
"No sooner did the elections come to pass than CN – devoid of either clear leadership or ideological coherence – fell apart as an effective parliamentary alliance" - was this before the elecion? Wording makes it look like it was at the same time.
Most sources I've seen basically state that CN effectively ceased to exist after the election ended. It still operated as a parliamentary group but not as a functioning electoral or political organization. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Sempértegui's tenure made headwinds in the development of children's rights law." I don't think headwinds is the right word here.
The word I think I was looking for was "headway". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Spot chek on Absent their political benefactor, Sempértegui and other Paredes allies were not nominated for reelection come the 2014 elections" - the entry for Sempértegui says that she was not re-elected; I don't see it supporting "Absent [her] political benefactor".
The entries for Paredes's other two members, Hernán Paredes and Alejandro Zapata, both mention J. L. Paredes's absence as the reason they weren't nominated for reelection. If you think the link isn't clear enough, I could try separating the claims. Something along the lines of: "Absent their political benefactor, Paredes's allies were not nominated for reelection come the 2014 elections. This was also the case for Sempértegui, who did not compete for a second term." 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)
Lead
"1985 to 1986 and 1988 and 1989." - needs a tweak, I think
Changed to "mid- to late 1980s". I looked for the current way to write the phrase ("mid-to-late / mid to late / mid- to late"). Grammarly said it should be "mid-to late" and the promptly called that wrong. So I dunno. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Im not sure about the phrase " became a woman of confidence" - maybe just confidant?
"His exile meant she was not re-nominated in 2014." - as above, I'm not sure this is currently supported by the cited text.
Changed to "given his exile" which, I think, gives the same meaning without making as assertive a claim. I guess this depends if you accept my reasoning above. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:13, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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