Talk:Substitute Teacher (Key & Peele)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 04:49, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

A favorite of mine. Happy to review this - if you have any interest in returning the favor I have a list of unreviewed nominations here. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 04:49, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• This is very pedantic, but the image caption in the infobox strikes me as being potentially very slightly incorrect if the character's actual name is "Aaron" and not "A-a-ron"
• "While taking roll, Garvey states the name of each person in the class" → could potentially give off the impression that he gets through everybody's name, which he does not
• View count can be updated from YouTube

Plot

• I'm not sure if this is an actionable point or just a thought, since I'm not sure what to suggest instead, but the formatting for Garvey's pronunciations seems a little unsatisfactory. I'm not entirely convinced throwing IPA in the middle of the paragraph is the best option:

...pronouncing each name incorrectly, including Jacqueline—pronounced /dʒeɪˈkwɛlɪn/ (jay-KWELL-in), Blake, pronounced...

It's just a little clunky and weirdly formal. Interested to hear your thoughts though I suspect your solution will probably end up being best.

Production

• "Key used his "Gupta"—a term " → I'd move this one sentence up, to be right after the sentence about the emphasis of that first syllable
• "early for yearbook photographs for their extracurricular clubs" → a bit repetitive with uses of "for"
• "after telling him that he needs" → ditto with "him" and "he", which also introduce a bit of ambiguity; recommend "after telling Garvey that he needs"
• "pronounced Jess-see-ca" → "s" in both the first and second syllable respelling seems unnecessary; it seems that this sound wouldn't span two syllables and would make more sense being classified as being part of either the first or the second

Reception and legacy

• Update dated view count statement
• "the fourth best" → hyphen
• "seventh best" → as above
• "attributed "Substitute Teacher" 's success" → to avoid the awkwardness with the quotes here, you could reword to "attributed the success of the sketch" or something similar
• "The plot would purportedly involve" → this sounds strange in past tense

Analysis

• "Qin also highlights" → switch to present tense from past
• the bit about parallelism is a bit confusing without explanation of the term
• "professor Kakali Bhattacharya reevaluates" → switch to present tense from past

That's all I have on the first read-through, take your time in getting to these! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:15, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

All issues resolved. As for the pronunciations, a footnote could work, but I see no issue with the current implementation. elijahpepe@wikipedia (he/him) 05:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

After looking at the pronunciations again I'd agree. The spot checks I did all look good; awesome job with the article overall. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 07:36, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

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