Talk:William L. Uanna/GA1
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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 08:56, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Hello! I'll take this one. Full review to follow in due course. Moswento talky 08:56, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Sources
Before I continue with this review, I have a major concern with the sources for this article. Currently, the majority of the article seems to be referenced to questionable sources. However, I may have misunderstood, and the prose is very good, so I'm leaving this open for you to respond.
- Ancestry.com - Aren't these just user-generated family trees?
- WW2enlistment.org - I realise you only use this for an enlistment date, but this appears to be a self-confessed potentially unreliable source. "We have reason to believe there is some information on the enlistee that might contain inaccuracies or data quality issues."
- "Short Biograpical Sketch" - this is currently used to source the majority of the article. My concern is two-fold. 1) As a biographical statement written by Uanna himself, relying so heavily on it raises questions of reliability. 2) How do we know it's even authentic?
- "Assassination as Non-Proliferation" - I cannot see a blog comment meeting WP:RS
- History News Network - as above
I'm sorry, but I am still not convinced that the article in its current form meets the GA criteria for verifiability. Overall, the article is well-written and a pleasure to read, but the main core of the article is referenced to "questionable sources" - i.e. sources closely connected with the subject that have been "published" without any apparent fact-checking or editorial oversight. The entire CIC section (except the first sentence) is referenced to such a source, and two other such sources are used a total of 7 times. This includes not just minor biographical details, but whole sections of his career, including achievements and figures etc. Some of this could be fixed using the two NYT articles, but you may still disagree with my assessment. If that is the case, would you like me to request a second opinion on this review? Moswento talky 10:31, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- No, I think that I need to withdraw the article and redo the sourcing. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:32, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- Text
Some of the text issues I spotted before the source issues temporarily halted my review:
- Lead: "I Service Command" - links to an article that doesn't seem to mention "I Service Command"
- Lead: "After the he" - Is there a missing word here?
- Early life: "he attended Medford High School." - this doesn't follow from the rest of the sentence
- Early life: "Massachusetts where" - "Massachusetts, where"
- CIC: "After the atomic bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in and" - missing word between "in" and "and"?